In Class Lab- Analyzing An Argument

1 Tori Baker's Essay

          What is the claim?

a.     The main point is that the use of dangerous ingredients in cosmetic products needs to be regulated to stop the spread of diseases they cause.

b.     The thesis is clearly stated at the end of the first paragraph, “These lethal ingredients in cosmetics need to be regulated, otherwise cancer among other diseases will continue to spread.”  

2.    What support does the writer offer for the claim?

a.     She discusses how the products we use everyday can and do negatively impact our health without us realizing. For example, exposure to some of the chemicals can contribute to the development of breast cancer or talcum powder causing ovarian cancer.

b.     Yes, she uses facts, statistics, examples, and expert testimonials.

c.      Yes, the reasons are plausible and they bring up an important issue because so many use these products and might not know the possible health consequences. The support for her claims is sufficient, as she uses a lot of facts to back them up.

3.    How evenhandedly does the writer present the issues?

a.     Yes, she mentions the fact that cosmetic companies claim that the dangerous ingredients no longer in their products and that “natural” products would be more expensive, and therefore they would not be purchased. But, she refutes them with facts, citing studies that have found toxic ingredients in cosmetics and that Target has distributing Pacifica (a chemical free brand) and that it is affordable.

b.     She acknowledges the counterarguments, but explains (reasonably) to her readers why they are invalid, and she provides facts for support.

c.      She dismisses the other arguments, but it is not off-putting because she does it with logic and facts.

d.     Her arguments are not generalizations. They are specific and backed up with  appropriate sources.

4.    What authorities or sources of outside information does the writer use?

a.     The sources are used to support her claims by providing facts and statistics.

b.     The sources are credible. She uses reputable sites like The New York Times, Colby College, Environmental Working Group.

c.      Yes, her sources are very current (all from at least 2010)

5.     How does the writer address you as a reader?

a.     No, she does not assume the audience knows about the cosmetics. She provides sufficient background information at the beginning, but it is not done in a condescending way, it sets up the topic nicely.

b.     Her language includes me, she uses phrases like “us”, “our”, and “you” in her paper. Also, her topic itself of cosmetics includes her audience because it is so relatable- we all use cosmetic products! And many people are not aware of their potential dangers.

c.      Yes, we share an interest and regard for our health and the ingredients in the products we use.